Details, details, details.

"... there were maggots inside maggots, there were maggots inside the maggots inside the initial maggots. Maggots everywhere. I immediately shut the fridge and threw up on the floor, my vomit kind of looked like maggots so I threw up again, then I threw up again because of the smell."

This is what I get when I ask for lots of details in my students' writing.